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( Mar. 14th, 2015 09:24 am)
(Retro post: Apparently when I updated this story I forgot to post about it on DW/LJ.)

Author: Derien
Genres: Science-fiction/Victorian Adventure/Queer Teen Romance.
Summary: In the distant future a group of settlers try to recreate Victorian England on another planet, with mixed results. Two boys from quite different social strata find themselves alone on a raft on an uncharted river.
Notes: My initial notes can be found at the top of Chapter 1, where the story so far is now archived on AO3.

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Chapter 21: A Mango a Day Does Not Keep The Doctor Away
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( Dec. 10th, 2014 08:21 pm)
Guys, I have a serious plot issue coming up with "Swept Away!" that I need help with badly. This is ... um, a bit weird. And I don't know how to avoid it.

Cut for spoilers )

PLEASE HELP ME.

Oh, also, if you haven't already heard: Riptide Publishing is launching a new LGBTQ YA section. I never before thought I had a snowballs chance in hell of getting "Swept Away" published, so I wasn't bothering to write with that in mind, but now there might be the slimmest sliver of a possibility. http://www.tritonya.com/
Title: Swept Away! - Two Boys' Adventures on The Great River (“With A Thousand Elephants!”) - A Pseudo Victorian Boys Adventure
Author: Derien
Genres: Science-fiction/Victorian Adventure/Queer Teen Romance.
Summary: In the distant future a group of settlers try to recreate Victorian England on another planet, with mixed results. Two boys from quite different social strata find themselves alone on a raft on an uncharted river.
Notes: My initial notes can be found at the top of Chapter 1, where the story so far is now archived on AO3.

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Chapter 20: Pachyderms and Pursuit

ETA: I'm pretty psyched! This is three chapters in one month, the best time I think I've ever made. :)
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( Nov. 4th, 2014 03:25 pm)
Well... I think I have Chapter 18 of Swept Away ready to post. Think. I'm inclined to muse on it overnight before posting, that's usually safest. Anyone interested in looking at it tonight?
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Okay, you friends who know everything about the Master and Commander series, two questions (maybe it's only two):

1) In that time period, was a Marine always a Marine, or did they enlist in the Army and then sometimes get sent to sea?

2) If you don't know, who should I ask?

(And my tag is absolutely not a promise that I'm going to write anything.)
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Of course I really have no idea when it started snowing. I slept in until 8am, then staggered in to take a bath, checked my email and LJ and didn't even look out the window until 9am, at which point there was already a good layer built up.

The only thing approaching useful I've done so far, today, was to write a letter to one of my step-sisters (Jojo), and asked her for addresses for her and anyone she thinks might like to hear from me.

Did I mention that last night I sat down and copied over some of the old holiday card lists we found on New Year's Eve, and that there were addresses on there for people I haven't heard from in years? One of the lists was from 2008, so I imagine some people might have moved in three years, but maybe I'll try sending a card.

It's not like a new years resolution... let's say this is a project. Project Write Letters.

In addition it seems I may have inadvertently asked to become a member of a closed writing group. Someone posted on one of the LJ comms I'm in that's about writing and suggested people get into this group. I was listening to Eor talk about something and didn't really pay attention to what I was doing, certainly didn't read the FAQ, just went ahead and applied. This morning I started to read the FAQ and it's tl;dr, but the comm sounds like work. I certainly don't want to do any work, I just miraculously want to start writing. *le sigh!*
I don't expect anyone to read this, at this point, I'm just mainly posting it so that the next time my computer decides to have a meltdown I won't lose it.

Let's see, what do I need to say, again? I wrote this, it's mine, I claim all rights to these characters, they're not stolen from anyone. Something like that? Eor betaed and I adore him for it, but I lost the spellchecker which I had set to Brit English in the last meltdown, so there might be more errors than usual.

Chapter 10, Sleep and Potatoes )

I'd better make a links post. What's the best way to do that?
I'm currently reading "The Historian" by Elizabeth Kostova, and aaaauuuuuugh!! Holy fuck, there's a difference between making the reader feel that they're smarter than the characters and making the reader feel like the characters are numb as fucking hakes. When I get the next step in the puzzle 127 pages before the characters do, that MIGHT be overdoing it a bit.

Granted it was 127 pages of telling us how beautiful the country is and how handsome all the people in it are (except for evil people, who are ugly) (is this why the person who loaned this book to me feels the book is 'beautiful'? Because somehow it doesn't strike me quite the same way. The book is not beautiful to me just because the character is apparently in love with the world.) and also a long detour into telling us about a medieval manuscript and why it's terribly important and then giving us the actual text of that manuscript, which takes up less space. And you invented that manuscript for this book, it's part of the fiction! Do you just wish to give an academic verisimilitude? Because here's a clue - this is fiction. Even people who like reading academic texts don't necessarily want fake ones inserted in the middle of their fiction.

Do-do is a very dull girl, lately - all I do is rant about houses and this damned book. The sooner I can finish it and move on to something I like, the better. A pox on coworkers forcing books upon me! And the worst thing is, I had to work with this particular coworker all day, yesterday, and all I wanted to do was talk about how much I hate the book she made me read. So I thought of anything else I could talk about, and was ridiculously chatty all day.

Must go find a new fuse for the van. It blew while I was driving, yesterday and let me tell you it's hard to drive in a snowstorm with no wipers or front heater blower. I was relatively pleased with the fact that it took me no time to diagnose the problem as a fuse; I pretty much knew instantly what was wrong, but then I didn't know where to find the fuse box... panel? ...so it didn't do me much good at the time. Eor has now yanked the bad one, and told me where to put the new one, so I can run down to the parts store and get it this morning - and it's not snowing, today, so I can see while I drive.

(Yesterday I had to take a cab to work, was 15 minutes late and didn't get to eat proper breakfast. I was not a happy camper. All cereal and no eggs gives me a tummy ache.)
Title: Swept Away! - Two Boys Adventures on The Great River
(“With A Thousand Elephants!”) - A Pseudo Victorian Boys Adventure

Author: Derien
Genres: Science-fiction/Victorian Adventure/Queer Teen Romance.
Notes:(Please go Back to Chapter One for full Notes)

This chapter = over 4,359 words.

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Previous chapters can be found on my own site here,
or read on LiveJournal: CH 1 / CH 2 / CH 3 / CH 4 / CH 5 / CH 6 / CH 7 / CH 8

Chapter Nine: Fire and Fish )
Chapter Ten
derien: It's a cup of tea and a white mouse.  The mouse is offering to buy Arthur's brain and replace it with a simple computer. (Default)
( Apr. 29th, 2008 09:38 pm)
With my P.T. having been extended, it looks as if I won't really have time to take that Statistics class during Summer Session A. I'm kind of down because I'd been looking forward to being back in school, but kind of relieved because I'm not doing well enough yet in my math practice sessions. (I'm sure it's already to late to even dream of finishing the story for the contest, though, so putting off the class isn't going to help me there. :P) And it's not offered at any convenient times for Summer Session B. Eor suggests I should look into one of the other Statistics classes for Summer Session B, though. I'll have to do that tomorrow.

Why yes, I do feel a little bit as though I'm trying to go in three directions at once and getting nowhere.
[livejournal.com profile] eor sums up our weekend pretty succinctly. I would also like to add that, due to his kindness I got a new/old keyboard (a clicky-key thing that it's going to take me a few days to get used to, I'm sure - atm the spacebar is giving me a hard time - but hopefully will increase my typing speed when I do because the old one was getting a little wonky) and I got time to work on stories. I wrote 2,400 words on my Psuedo Victorian Boys Adventure back when we were on vacation, so I got that typed up (though after editing that's gone down to 2,100 something) and I did 640 on the Heinleinesque story. I can't see me finishing that before June at this rate, but... maybe. Who knows. If I can get inspired. I mean... editing takes time. And all of it takes time where my neck keeps twinging on me if I type for too long. :P
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About two months since I posted a chapter. This is getting bad. Someday I'll get to the thousand elephants, I promise.

Feedback whore right here. Especially whether this chapter title is too... something.

Title: Swept Away! - Two Boys Adventures on The Great River
(“With A Thousand Elephants!”) - A Pseudo Victorian Boys Adventure

Author: Derien
Genres: Science-fiction/Victorian Adventure/Queer Teen Romance.
Notes:(Please go Back to Chapter One for full Notes)
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This chapter - 3,481 words.

Previous chapters can be found on my own site here,
or read on LiveJournal: CH 1 / CH 2 / CH 3 / CH 4 / CH 5 / CH 6 / CH 7

Chapter Eight - In Which Phipps is Hot and Tom is Bothered )

Onward to Chapter Nine
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( Nov. 13th, 2007 10:31 am)
*is shamefaced* I didn't go to the gym, yesterday. Well, strictly speaking I went. I drove down there, went in, walked around, didn't see Phoebe, and I left again. I wanted to go buy some ice-cream. Which I haven't eaten any of, yet.

Maybe I will, now, though, as reward for getting some work done on Chapter Eight. :) Not sure if I got enough mileage out of the fever, yet. I hope it's a little better than Seven, which Eor said lost a lot of vitality when I rewrote it to make it longer.

I guess the lack of comment on that excerpty thing I wrote seems to indicate it really should stay on the cutting room floor. I wonder if my attempt at giving some background for 'ethnicity' as understood in their society was so bad as to be thought offensive?

Phone...

Uh, Eor? You know how we decided we won't buy a house until March? That guy from Court Street Realty just called, and I sort of went ahead and said we'll see that place in Brunswick at 2pm on Saturday. I would at least like to see it. Okay, I'm just a wuss and didn't want to say that we'd changed our minds, but ALSO I kind of think that looking at houses is fun, and probably educational. But if you want me to phone him back tomorrow and withdraw I'll be glad to.

Everyone else - you know how the pictures of the last place we looked at were scary? This place may be even scarier.
http://www.flickr.com/photos/9865453@N03/2001820187/
http://www.flickr.com/photos/9865453@N03/2002617774/

PS ETA: How do I link back to a Flickr photo so that it appears on my LJ?
Just because the law says the management company is required to heat us to at least 68 degrees does not mean they have to leave it at exactly 68 degrees day after day. This is becoming tiresome. I may need to get a set of longjohns, my knees are cold. Instinct kicked in and for a while we couldn't stop eating. I've lost track of how many cups of tea I've had.

I've become such a wuss. Used to would have been I'd have been happy enough if the house was this warm. ;)

Should be writing, but am reading "The Moon Is A Harsh Mistress" - damned good story. I feel horrible about every bad thing I've said about Heinlein. ;) Something about the style of it had me thinking that a Heinleinesque story written with a Bertiesque voice could possibly be quite a lot of fun - TMIAHM is narrated by a guy who leaves out all unnecessary words. But I suspect it would be encroaching on the sort of thing that Charles Stross is coming out with, soon.

Charles Stross )

And in other news of people getting back to you, Simon Carr )

Now we're cooking a ham, so that's helping the temperature in here a little.
I do think I should be using more of those wonderfully stilted Victorian sounding phrases, like "excited in him a feeling of..." Isn't that a passive-voice construction, or am I confused? I'm not good at dissecting sentences.

I can't do polls because I don't have a paid account right now, but if I could I'd poll you all. What do you think? Should I strive harder for the more wordy and stilted sound?

ETA:
If anyone wanted to ramble on at me about what passive voice is (because Eor's tried to 'splain it to me a few times but my head she doesn't seem to hold this stuff - I need endless repitition) and if Victorian prose really is as full of it (passive voice, that is) as I think it is, I wouldn't mind at all.

How is it that in cooking one meal last night I seem to have used every pot and pan in the house? Have done one load of dishes, but now the sun is high, the sky is clear, and I'm thinking I should go for a walk for my poor back (it was hurting, yesterday), and let those ones dry. Tomorrow it's back to work. I need to start interspersing more vacation time, it's quite good for me.

I did do a random search on the USAjobs site trying to find anything at all in a 75 mile radius. Five results, all far too technical for me.
derien: It's a cup of tea and a white mouse.  The mouse is offering to buy Arthur's brain and replace it with a simple computer. (Default)
( Oct. 25th, 2007 10:26 am)
Chapter Eight is long enough that I might call it done, though it sort of just ends. I should probably manufacture a cliffhanger, which could be done easily enough, I'm just not sure I want to. Should I? It seems in keeping.

Anyway, meanwhile here's a snippet I that popped into my head which I'm hoping might work it's way into Chapter Nine or Ten, but then again it might not. Has boys doing each other's hair. Heh. ;>

"Social Grooming" an excerpt from Swept Away that might end up on the cutting room floor )
derien: It's a cup of tea and a white mouse.  The mouse is offering to buy Arthur's brain and replace it with a simple computer. (Default)
( Oct. 24th, 2007 02:45 pm)
So I finished "Farnham's Freehold," which was a very odd book and full of so many twists and turns that you'd swear he had been writing it in installments, and I continued on with "Gentlemen Prefer Blondes" by Anita Loos, which I had started at work last week or even longer ago, and I also wrote more on Chapter Eight, which I have been overdue in posting. Only I think "Gentlemen Prefer Blondes" is not the best thing to read to encourage by writing skills, because it's written as though it were the diary of a dumb blonde girl, and she writes a lot like this entry, only with more misspellings, and a lot more confusions. It is all very entertaining though! (And she's not dumb at all when it comes to manipulating people.)

Otherwise I have had a bath, and gone out for a coffee in hopes of running into someone I'd hoped to say hi to (but he wasn't around) and not done the dishes, but I'll do them right now so that I can let some of Anita Loosness seep out of my brane and then get back to writing Chapter Eight.
Eor fixed the starter on the van, I polished all of one door and the running board on the left side of the car... with his help. Um. We cleaned. And got a new bookshelf, which makes that corner of the bedroom look much nicer, and the whole bedroom feels a little better without the imposing towers of books. My bedside table cubby is still full, but I'm not in danger of an avalanch which will kill me in my sleep.

I finished book #34) Monster's Legacy by Andre Norton )
I've started on what will be book #35 when I finish - The Man With The Golden Gun, Ian Flemming )

And I wrote over 3,000 words for Chapter Seven of "Swept Away!" So how do you like that - I actually made my goal for the month, and made it up, mostly, over the three-day weekend. ;) Obviously all I have to do is take a three-day weekend just for writing, every month. Hm. You know, that really appeals to me. Now, of course, it's in Eor's hands for a few days and then I'll have re-writes to do, undoubtably, but I feel pretty good at the moment.
Title: Swept Away! - Two Boys Adventures on The Great River
(“With A Thousand Elephants!”) - A Pseudo Victorian Boys Adventure

Author: Derien
Genres: Science-fiction/Victorian Adventure/Queer Teen Romance.
Notes:(Please see Chapter One for full Notes)
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(Final word count for this chapter: 2,278.)


Previous chapters can be found on my own site here,
or read on LiveJournal: CH 1 / CH 2 / CH 3 / CH 4 / CH 5 /

* * * * * * * * * * * *
Chapter Six - Swept Away! )
*******

Onward to Chapter Seven
#26 - "Swallows and Amazons," Arthur Ransome - got really good about halfway through, and toward the end I couldn't put it down. (And now, thanks to [livejournal.com profile] littleredhead, I have the second one to read! :))

#27 - Asimov's Science Fiction Magazine, June 2007 - Eor had this to say about it. my reflections )

I just started reading "Microserfs," so I really ought to finish that before I begin the other S & A book.

The [livejournal.com profile] bujold_fic ficathon is finishing up, so there's a ton of new and cool stuff to read over there, and I'm having to restrain myself. There's also been a few new fics on [livejournal.com profile] indeedsir in the last week - everyone seems to be getting inspired! I've been waiting for the ficathon to get done before posting that Ivan/Byerly story I wrote, and now I'm having my doubts as to my Byerly characterization, but that's okay.

Chapter Six of "Swept Away!" is ready for posting in two days. And now I'm terrified because I have to write, proof and re-write all of Chapter Seven during August. Ow. Why have I done this to myself? I mean, it's not impossible for normal people - [livejournal.com profile] daegaer could knock it off in a day - but I'm so damned slow! Speaking of which, Mistress of the Night asked me to send her links to read it. Hm. I should do that tonight.
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