Not quite story

Chapter Eight is long enough that I might call it done, though it sort of just ends. I should probably manufacture a cliffhanger, which could be done easily enough, I'm just not sure I want to. Should I? It seems in keeping.

Anyway, meanwhile here's a snippet I that popped into my head which I'm hoping might work it's way into Chapter Nine or Ten, but then again it might not. Has boys doing each other's hair. Heh. ;>

( "Social Grooming" an excerpt from Swept Away that might end up on the cutting room floor )

on the writing of "Swept Away"

I do think I should be using more of those wonderfully stilted Victorian sounding phrases, like "excited in him a feeling of..." Isn't that a passive-voice construction, or am I confused? I'm not good at dissecting sentences.

I can't do polls because I don't have a paid account right now, but if I could I'd poll you all. What do you think? Should I strive harder for the more wordy and stilted sound?

ETA:
If anyone wanted to ramble on at me about what passive voice is (because Eor's tried to 'splain it to me a few times but my head she doesn't seem to hold this stuff - I need endless repitition) and if Victorian prose really is as full of it (passive voice, that is) as I think it is, I wouldn't mind at all.

How is it that in cooking one meal last night I seem to have used every pot and pan in the house? Have done one load of dishes, but now the sun is high, the sky is clear, and I'm thinking I should go for a walk for my poor back (it was hurting, yesterday), and let those ones dry. Tomorrow it's back to work. I need to start interspersing more vacation time, it's quite good for me.

I did do a random search on the USAjobs site trying to find anything at all in a 75 mile radius. Five results, all far too technical for me.

rare fandoms

I almost wish I participated in Yuletide so I could request something about Neanderthals with red hair. Or, you know, Bigfoot.