I wish I could remember how to make LJ hearts...

[derien]

Although I'm sure that anyone who cares already has daegaer friended, I feel it my duty to let you all know that she has Chapters Forty-Nine and Fifty of Mars Assassins (Bleed Into One) up, and they are as full of personality conflicts, cliffhangeryness and sweet, sweet cuddling as a story could possibly be. 


For those few of you not familiar with it, she's been writing this since November of 2004 - you should find Chapter One, here - and I think you really shouldn't try to read it too quickly or you might start going 'But they've been in the desert for a year!'  (Chapter Thirty-One, posted June 6 of '05, they're already in the ruined city in the desert.)  Pace yourself - it should be read in installments, as it was posted. :)  I think it's vital that Crawford's brother, Micah, gets to take his time trying to drive wedges between Crawford and his friends.  And I am so never going to be able to write such hot sweet cuddling.


I was going to go to the library to see if I can get the book club book for this month ("The Glass Castle" by... Jennifer Walls.  How can I remember that?), but it's raining.  I started to say pouring, but not really, it's just... well, it's in earnest, and it's not letting up.  Hm.  Well.  I guess I could take my uniform shirt and socks wrapped in plastic in my knapsack, and wear the pants I have at work if I get too terribly wet. 

Comments

[derien.livejournal.com]

But what a wonderful 19 chapters! I've loved every minute of it, and I think the cahracters may have some moments of wondering, later, if that wasn't some of the best time of their life - or would have been, if Micah hadn't shown up. :)

[daegaer.livejournal.com]

Those 19 chapters have certainly been good for Nagi (or terribly, terribly bad for him, if one takes the view that selfish, amoral, sociopathic assassins dedicated to bringing about a Thousand Year Reich aren't ideal role models for impressionable children . . .) Schuldig could definitely do without Micah, though (BTW, how chuffed am I that everyone hates this OC so much? I must be doing something right!)

Can I ask if you think the flashbacks work as they are? They are supposed to be thematically tied in with their surrounding sections - and even though characters like Antoine Fournier and Karin Andersson (see, she has a first name!) have turned up relatively late in the game, I actually had their stories planned quite a while ago. I don't know if the Rosenkreyz sections just look like attempts to delay the "real" story, though. While as far as I can see, the "real" story is the Fall and Rise - or possibly the Rise and Fall - of Brad Crawford and his friends.

[derien.livejournal.com]

I think the thematic tie-in of the flashbacks seems to work quite well. I always enjoy them as character-building scenes - glimpses into why they are who they are. I think they're important.

I'd love to see Andersson affect something toward the end of the story, even if it's just the smallest thing and indirectly.

[daegaer.livejournal.com]

I enjoy the flashbacks perhaps too much :-) Back in the mists of the primeval swamps of pre-November 2004 I had vaguely thought about a more linear structure with all the Rosenkreuz stuff first (I'm not claiming I had it all planned in meticulous detail by any means, it was a NaNo after all! But I did know certain things about Rosenkreuz and the teachers and students therein). Then the linear story went out the window!

Oh man. I have a big chunk of Andersson-story, and it just won't fit into the story as it now is - far too, ahem, direct in its subject matter. Ah well, she'll probably turn up in some form or other as no doubt will Ellen Williams (who? That would be the tall English girl who shoves the hostage forward. There's quite a large cast of Rosenkreuz students in my head wondering why they don't get a spot in the main characters' story :-)