one of the downfalls of fics

[derien]

Much as I loved hippediva's "Pirate Vindaloo" I've become bogged down in Chapter Seventeen, mostly because the damned 'cute kid' character has become really annoying to me.  A little bit of cute kid goes a real long way, and he's gotten far overused.  Besides which I can't figure out his age at all.  I thought he was like eleven at first, but he could be six, I really can't tell.  In conclusion: kids in fic - to be avoided. 

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[eor.livejournal.com]

The in fic bit is superfluous.