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Do you like the format with the links to previous chapters above the current chapter? Eventually I put the link to the next chapter at the bottom of each - do you think that should be under the cut or after it?
Should I have shown the scene where the one Whistler chastises Ethan for being lazy? It didn't seem like I could work much up out of it at the time, but in retrospect I can imagine a little dialogue, so do you think I should add something more, later on?
Do you think I should have added a scene where their friends take them to the abandoned cabin to get more vegetables, before the 'trial'? Would that create more of a sense of mystery and tension, with the boys wondering what happened to those people? Again, somehow as I was doing my rewrites it seemed as though I couldn't get it to fit in, but maybe I should have just shoved it in there and ended the chapter in a different place.
Should I have shown the scene where the one Whistler chastises Ethan for being lazy? It didn't seem like I could work much up out of it at the time, but in retrospect I can imagine a little dialogue, so do you think I should add something more, later on?
Do you think I should have added a scene where their friends take them to the abandoned cabin to get more vegetables, before the 'trial'? Would that create more of a sense of mystery and tension, with the boys wondering what happened to those people? Again, somehow as I was doing my rewrites it seemed as though I couldn't get it to fit in, but maybe I should have just shoved it in there and ended the chapter in a different place.