some questions re Swept Away

[derien]

Do you like the format with the links to previous chapters above the current chapter? Eventually I put the link to the next chapter at the bottom of each - do you think that should be under the cut or after it?



Should I have shown the scene where the one Whistler chastises Ethan for being lazy? It didn't seem like I could work much up out of it at the time, but in retrospect I can imagine a little dialogue, so do you think I should add something more, later on?

Do you think I should have added a scene where their friends take them to the abandoned cabin to get more vegetables, before the 'trial'? Would that create more of a sense of mystery and tension, with the boys wondering what happened to those people? Again, somehow as I was doing my rewrites it seemed as though I couldn't get it to fit in, but maybe I should have just shoved it in there and ended the chapter in a different place.

Comments

[janamelie.livejournal.com]

I think it's more logical to have chapter links at the bottom of the page.

A flashback in Ethan's mind which then leads him to do something constructive could be good. :)

I don't know; if it wouldn't fit, maybe it wasn't meant to be there.

[derien.livejournal.com]

Thanks for your comments, I really appreciate them. :)

A flashback for Ethan, I'm mulling on this. Y'know, I haven't yet shown the reader the inside of Ethan's mind at all. My primary beta, Eor, thinks I should stay all from Tom's POV, but I'm thinking I should have done some breaking out MUCH earlier on than now and done some omniscient and some from Ethan's perspective.